Here is a Body Paragraph example regarding Santiago’s humbleness reinforcing his being a role model in the novella The Old Man and the Sea:

     First, throughout the novella, Santiago consistently shows a high degree of humbleness in his exchanges with people and the natural world. (Topic Sentence) During a conversation about fishing, Manolin says that Santiago is the best fisherman but Santiago shows his humility by disagreeing with Manolin’s opinion. (Point – about being humble with people) On page 7 Manolin states, 

“And the best fisherman is you.”

Santiago replies with, “No. I know others better.”

Manolin continues, “Qué va, there are many good fishermen and some great ones. But there is only you.”

Santiago replies, “Thank you. You make me happy. I hope no fish will come along so great that he will prove us wrong.” (Proof from the novel that supports the Point)

Santiago shows his humility by disagreeing with Manolin’s evaluation. Santiago is only what he is, a man and a fisherman, and reveals to Manolin that humility is stronger than pride. (Explanation of how the Proof supports the Point) Santiago exhibits great humbleness in his interactions with people, and he grants much respect to the creatures he encounters which enables him to be an ideal role model to Manolin. (Concluding Sentence – restatement of the Topic Sentence)

• This Body Paragraph has one Point Proof Explanation. Often a Body Paragraph will have 2 instances of Point Proof Explanation supporting the Topic Sentence.